This moment my task is about letter of inquiry and request.
Karelstraat 137
1051 Amsterdam, SN D15
Netherlands
March 22,2016
Sinanta Publisher
Box 1408
Amsterdam, AC T14
Attention: Customer Service Department
The Dreamland English Course is planning to order a hundred of TOEFL books from your company. Formerly, I need some data for the proposal. Therefor, would you mind to send me some information?
1. What are the kind of TOEFL books that you already have?
2. How are the prices of each book?
3. What is your recommendation of book that suitable for Senior High School students?
4. Are there any discount if I buy a hundred books?
I look forward to hearing from you. Thank you for your cooperation.
Sincerely,
Sintya
Sintya Nirmayasari
That's my letter. Correct me if I'm wrong.... ~\(≧▽≦)/~
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Karelstraat 137
1051 Amsterdam, SN D15
Netherlands
March 22,2016
Sinanta Publisher
Box 1408
Amsterdam, AC T14
Attention: Customer Service Department
The Dreamland English Course is planning to order a hundred of TOEFL books from your company. We're a friend of one of your product, Teaching English for Children. Formerly, I need some data for the proposal. Therefore, would you mind to send me some information?
1. What kind of TOEFL books that you have?
2. How much the prices of each book?
3. What is your recommendation of book that suitable for Senior High School students?
4. Are there any discount if I buy a hundred books?
I look forward to hearing from you. Thank you for your cooperation.
Sincerely,
Sintya
Sintya Nirmayasari
Overall, your letter is good, but you'd better type " How much are... " than "How are... " 😀😀
BalasHapussame as above, you should use how much instead of how are.
BalasHapusand i think for thankyou it should be a space there, or you can use thanks instead
"Therefore"
BalasHapus"What kind of... you have?"
"How much the prices of the book?"
Honestly, i'm not really sure whether i correct them right or not😅 Good letter, sin :)
Such a good letter, Sintya. But you have some typo word in your letter like 'therefore', 'thankyou' it should be 'thank you' and 'some data' you give capital 's' over there.
BalasHapus